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I thought I could fix it

I thought I could help

I thought I could stop you

But I couldn’t…

You left in a hurry and raving mad

I yelled I hated you and you started to cry

I didn’t know how much it hurt;
Until I saw your eyes

I wish I said sorry when I had the chance

I never though it would be the last time;
Last time I saw you alive

I wish you knew, knew how I really felt

It will forever haunt me;
Those things I said and didn't mean

And I regret not saying all the things I should have

Now all I can do is wipe the tear from my eye;
And remember, remember my regret



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The following comments are for "I thought I could…"
by poetfreak

Is this true?
This one was really really good! I like it a lot! hmmmm...what are my sugestions, don't change this one at all! It is beautiful! I love it alot!

( Posted by: heartbreakersbeware [Member] On: May 13, 2005 )

I Thought I Could...
Thank you for the comment. But one thing I need to work on is my punctuation and if you would help it would help me a lot.

PoetFreak

( Posted by: poetfreak [Member] On: May 16, 2005 )

Hmmm...
This poem is your own puntuation! You are kinda useing puntuation like Emily Dickinson! No one ever understood how she did it! But the way you do it makes you rpoem in this case flow! Please don't cahnge the puntuation!

( Posted by: heartbreakersbeware [Member] On: May 16, 2005 )





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