Lit.Org - a community for readers and writers Advanced Search
 




Average Rating
0.00

(0 votes)

You must login to vote

Stretching East
clouds march
tactfully wading
watery minefields

In regulated
regiments
rays of light
parade the sky

Forcing,
the retreat of night
awakening,
the mirage of day
and losing,
the war, in every, single, way.











Related Items

Comments

The following comments are for "Vietnamese Sunrise"
by 0207070

Clouds march
a very eery image i get there. I like it a whole lot because it does somewhat personify the whole aspect of it nicely done.

( Posted by: ryangilr0y [Member] On: March 23, 2005 )

evocative
Very nice, evocative poem. The first stanza was my favourite but it has fairly strong imagery throughout. The associations between daybreak and an army seem appropriate for Vietnam given the relatively recent war there. Nice and moody work.
cheers
smithy

( Posted by: smithy [Member] On: March 25, 2005 )

"Sunrise" in the Nam
277: Good read. Nice imagery and metaphorically strong.

Just saw on CNN, Stickley furniture co. is now manufacturing their fine "American traditonal" furniture in new factory..Built in Ho Chi Ming City, Viet Nam. Workers will "earn" $100. per MONTH.

Enjoyed,
B

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: March 25, 2005 )





Add Your Comment

You Must be a member to post comments and ratings. If you are NOT already a member, signup now it only takes a few seconds!

All Fields are required

Commenting Guidelines:
  • All comments must be about the writing. Non-related comments will be deleted.
  • Flaming, derogatory or messages attacking other members well be deleted.
  • Adult/Sexual comments or messages will be deleted.
  • All subjects MUST be PG. No cursing in subjects.
  • All comments must follow the sites posting guidelines.
The purpose of commenting on Lit.Org is to help writers improve their writing. Please post constructive feedback to help the author improve their work.


Username:
Password:
Subject:
Comment:





Login:
Password: