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Yeah, I remember you.
You were that guy...yeah. That guy. The one in the jacket at my door.
You were that guy...yeah. That guy in the jacket at my door with the paper.
The paper I could have delt without, but you I remember.
You reminded me of a dead rose when your paper fell.
The paper I could have delt without, but you dropped it.
And you smiled.
You dropped the paper, Mr. Dead Rose, and smiled at something.
I would have brought you tea, but a dead rose like you can hardly drink...tea.
I would have brought you in from the cold, but you brought it with you.
I hardly think that's courteous.
The wind took the paper.
The paper I could have delt without, but you swept it away.
You dropped the paper, Mr. Dead Rose, and swept it away with wind.
I hardly think that's courteous.
You made me cold with your wind, your black jacket, your dead rose, and your paper.
The paper I could have delt without...but you took me anyway.
I hardly think that's courteous.


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I am Jack's wasted life.
I'd like to thank the Academy...


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The following comments are for "Don't Answer The Door"
by coma

Coma
I loved this line:

"I would have brought you in from the cold, but you brought it with you."

Felicia

( Posted by: FeliciaStone [Member] On: March 22, 2005 )





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