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I'm in the arms of my demon,
As we sail on by
The waining moon dips into
The heartless blackened sky.

My pale wings seep red blood,
My distress and pain, I scream
Fallen like him that once before
No way I'll be redeemed.

I've never felt all this before
Or felt at all, my friend.
Life, stay with me through this
Please be this not my end.

I'm sorry, Lord, for sinning.
An angel should stay pure,
But I'd sin forever and again
For this love forever more.

"I love you," I say, as
My demon carries me to a place.
A warm tear spills, my broken hand
At last to touch his face.

I've fallen from grace to be here.
It's been a long, painful fall,
But it's better to love and lose Heaven
Then to never have loved at all.


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I am Jack's wasted life.
I'd like to thank the Academy...



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The following comments are for "No Redemption"
by coma

demonic possession
Hello Coma. I enjoyed your descent into the arms of your demon. There was a little bit of variation in the rhythmn of the rhyme, but after a while I got it. I liked the colors and the imagery, particularly in the first couple of stanzas. I wonder in the second last stanza line 3 whether the tear could "..spills onto my hand" instead of the comma and broken?? Also in the last stanza instead of the comma an "and"?? Sounding it out it seemed more fluid to me that way. See what you think?
cheers
smithy

( Posted by: Smithy [Member] On: April 3, 2005 )





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