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At the center of the web
Sits a widow spider
Always dressed in black
With a splash of red -
(It’s slendering, you know);
Shirt cut low
With cups pulled high
And a shake-n-bake tan.
Always a fresh manicure,
Pedicure and waxed brows
From the afternoon spa.

“Hey there!” She sings
In her cheerleader voice
With forced giggle
And playful flirtings -
That have the effect
(On enlightened ones)
Of fingernails on a chalkboard.
And every conversation
(With the layers peeled off)
Only chants, “Me.”

Another tiny butterfly is stopped
By the sticky strands.
“Aren’t you a nice little thing,”
The spider seduces…
“How lucky I am to have you…”
She repeats,
As the appreciative butterfly,
Caught up in conversation
Doesn’t notice
The nurturing spider
Spinning her tighter and tighter
Into her burial gauze.

As she sucks the blood
From her innocent guest
She doesn’t notice
Or care
That the life force is damaged
And the butterfly is fading away,
Because she feels the vibration
Of other visitors
And is busy figuring out
How to make this look innocent
As she calls out to the next,
“Hey there!...”

Felicia Stone 3/17/05


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Here, I share, with stark honesty, my life.


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The following comments are for "The Black Widow"
by FeliciaStone

A little disappointed....
To be the first one to comment! I can't wait to read the feedback for this because I know it will be great! I loved this one for many reasons, some of them literary. My favorites are
lines 5, 20&21, the entire third stanza, and the last four lines. But each line is necessary to tell the story. This really is awesome. Great Job Felicia! I'll be back to read others comments here!
Elle

( Posted by: Eleanor [Member] On: March 18, 2005 )

Elle - How fun
Eleanor,

How fun to read your comments and climb back up to the poem to see which lines were your favorites! I couldn't wait for this one to post because it was just fun to write. It was one of those you don't edit, you write it once and it is what it is.

Actually, I had had another moment where I was going to write on the same subject, using the "preying" mantis (but didn't get out of bed to write it. Then, lo and behold, this popped into my head - same idea.)

Thanks for stopping in and commenting!

:)

Felicia

( Posted by: feliciastone [Member] On: March 18, 2005 )

Spin a Tale
Nice work, too funny! I had to laugh at this one because it is just a riot. The way you put it together and ended it was great! Kind of a little too scary for me though, I am a vegan and all, JK. Ha!
Christian Albert

( Posted by: ChristianAlbert [Member] On: March 18, 2005 )

ChristianAlbert
Yes, this was fun...

Are you a vegan? I did not know that... I could have said she sucks the bloody mary's! LOL

Funny that my fun poem was so inspired by my frustration at watching this spider in action over the past week.

How healthy to make something fun of it. This was a nice way to vent.

Thanks again for commenting!

Felicia

( Posted by: feliciastone [Member] On: March 18, 2005 )

Elle
I printed this up for my mother-in-law. She knew by the second line who the spider was. Now that's good writing! JK!!

Felicia

( Posted by: feliciastone [Member] On: March 20, 2005 )

truck stop glamor
I think if Dolly Parton would make a song out of this, she'd bump Carly Simon and Susanne Vega.

At the same time a little bit too colloquial for me. It could benefit from a daring, poetic licensed rearrangement of words, etc.

Teflorence

( Posted by: Teflon [Member] On: March 20, 2005 )

Teflon
I replied to this. Did I send it to you by private message?

( Posted by: feliciastone [Member] On: March 22, 2005 )

tangled web
Yes, this was fun, and they always are the best to write and usually read too. My only question is about the line (it's slendering you know). Should that refer to the black (and thus go on the line above) or the black with the red splash (then it should stay where it is)? Happy writings.
cheers
smithy

( Posted by: smithy [Member] On: March 27, 2005 )

Come into my web!
Paula,

Loved it, how do you tell the sex of spiders? Was it female? Seriously this was fun, I can relate it to so many people...both men and women!

Can't wait for you to write about the 'preying mantis' but that definately will be a female!

Have Fun,

Ivor

( Posted by: ivordavies [Member] On: March 27, 2005 )

Ivor - thanks
So great to see you in here posting again.

This was so much fun to write and share! Thanks for reading and commenting. Nice to see your face again!

Felicia

( Posted by: FeliciaStone [Member] On: March 27, 2005 )

Smithy - web
The person represented here usually wears black to look thinner, usually has some kind of black jacket or top with a low-cut spaghetti-strap tank under it to bring attention to her bust.

A "tasty?" nugget:

When her son was four, he told me that she tells her friends she likes "to wear things that show [her] boobies so when she bends over the jewelry counter in the store she works at, the men will buy more".

Does this info help?

As always, thanks for reading and commenting.

Felicia

( Posted by: FeliciaStone [Member] On: March 27, 2005 )

F-IN' MA!
Hey there- I finally had a few minutes to check this out... I know you've been wanting me to for a long time. It's good to see that you have been writing so much lately. If you don't work out your brain, even that can go limp (it didn't take me long after graduating to figure that one out). God has given you many gifts- don't let any of them go to waste. I'm going to be writing here as often as I can too, but we'll see how often that'll be.

You can get published- I'd love to see great things for you.

Keep loving, keep caring, and keep inspiring. You are amazingly gifted in the humanities- maybe many more than just myself can see that now.

You might not know it, but I really do love you

( Posted by: TyDuval [Member] On: April 30, 2005 )

Sissy-Lou - black widow
Hey Girl!

What a surprise to see you in here! Your comment made your Mom cry.

Yes, I have wanted you to get in here and start posting, too. I remember how you used to call from UMF and read all your stuff to us on the phonet (and edit my novel). We really loved it! (We haven't quite recovered from the story about the guy and the nail gun, though. Hehe!)

I look forward to reading your posts. I'm glad you will be getting back into all the things that are uniquely YOU! Let me know if you want to submit anything. You can use my 2005 Writer's Market.

Love ya!

Yo Mamma

p.s. Did you read "I Wept"?

( Posted by: feliciastone [Member] On: May 1, 2005 )

oops - typo
what's a phonet?

FS

( Posted by: feliciastone [Member] On: May 1, 2005 )





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