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Shutup and kiss me
Your lips are a world of its own

You are all I see
Make me moan

Make me grown
Have me tingle all over

Let us remember this night
Forever and ever

Turn off the light
We will be one

Enter me
And make it hurt

Soon it is done
As you can see

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Rawr..


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The following comments are for "Make it Hurt"
by Vinceypoo

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The title through me for a curve, then I realize that one of the great things bout it is how the title is very misleading which made you want to read it and rereading the whole poem, I see where it flows nicely.

( Posted by: ryangilr0y [Member] On: March 17, 2005 )

Rawr - ?
What is the make it hurt part about?

( Posted by: feliciastone [Member] On: March 17, 2005 )





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