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For you I sit motionless,
my thoughts busy enough for all.
You are late again,
waiting for the dreaded call.

In a sick place and space,
fear turns suddenly to wrath.
For the slam of your car door,
waiting for your steps up front path.

In silence, in doubt of my fortune,
I create all scenarios of doom.
Passing the time playing that game,
waiting for you to walk in the room.

My anger slowly shifts into love,
my soul-mate please come home to me.
My one and only on this earth,
waiting for you, where could you be?

I fell panicked and helpless,
needing your voice to calm my fear.
A car door slam, steps and a voice,
all fear is forgotten, you are here.

Into the house, your voice loud,
demanding your dinner and a drink.
Going on about work and the long drive,
why did I worry, why do I even bother to think?


------
Freedom is living life without needing perfection


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The following comments are for "The Good Wife"
by ChristianAlbert

ChristianAlbert
This poem is very wonderfully done. It just flows from beginning to end.

I remember those days. I'm glad I read this. It made me take notice of what I have now.

I've never once had a moment like that with Corey. We live 5 minutes from his job and he's one of those guys who usually calls just before he leaves and never takes detours. His hours are very predictable. He's very predictable too.

Sometimes we don't take stock of things. I think I'll thank him today for being one of those guys.

Thanks for posting this very well written and nicely expressed piece. Thanks for reminding me about one more thing I should be thankful for.

Felicia

( Posted by: FeliciaStone [Member] On: March 17, 2005 )

Reply Felicia
So true that we all have phases of our lives, appreciating the abundance of the moment we are in is always a good thing to remember to do. Thank you for reading and commenting on this poem. I wrote it awhile ago, but sometimes it still applies.
Christian

( Posted by: ChristianAlbert [Member] On: March 17, 2005 )

CA - I wrote a poem about him

Your piece inspired me to write a poem about my husband. It was the first. Thank you for making me notice.

Felicia

( Posted by: FeliciaStone [Member] On: March 17, 2005 )

ChristianAlbert
What a wonderful and sweet poem, I guess we all go through this,huh? Not so much anymore,(I guess I finally feel secure) but I remember when I first got married checking the clock constantly waiting for my husband's safe return home. It is really nice knowing you guys wait for us too.

Look forward to reading more of you.

Nae

( Posted by: nae411 [Member] On: March 17, 2005 )

Nae: We All Wait
Nae,
Thank you very much for reading this and commenting. I think men and woman are insecure about their significant other at some point in their relationship. I so often have asked myself why I even bother, the world hasn't changed in the moment, just me. I am very glad that I expressed myself well enough to show my own insecurities so clearly. Once more, thank you for commenting, I really appreciate the feedback.

Christian Albert

( Posted by: ChristianAlbert [Member] On: March 18, 2005 )

good wife
Christian, every one said all the nice things I was thinking about this. So I will just say, as well as liking it, I wondered if the second stanza could be left out? for me the first flows into the third so nicely while the second seems out of place and is repeated later in stanza 5. Just me maybe, so ignore at will ~smile~ warm regards huni.

( Posted by: Huni [Member] On: March 18, 2005 )

Huni Re: The Good Wife
Thank you so very much for the suggestion, I will re-post it in a while like that and see what I get for feedback.
I just would like to make sure you know how much suggestions and hint help me say what I really need to say. Have you ever read something a million times and not seen its error?
Thanks for the fresh eyes.
Christian

( Posted by: ChristianAlbert [Member] On: March 20, 2005 )





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