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Those pink flips flops
that sat in my room
wanting to be worn.

longing
being

Those pink flip flops
that sat on my floor
wanting to be used.

waiting
seeing

Those pink flip flops.

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*laura*


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by englishgal16

take it further
It is cute, but could be cuter. Those pink flip flops just didn't do enough yet. Maybe another couple of stanzas in a similar light tone would round it out? Could be worth pursuing further?
cheers
smithy

( Posted by: Smithy [Member] On: March 30, 2005 )





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