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the winter scene was harsh
quiet, whiteness, soft
but metal, sound, and darkness
would change this all at once
the muffled screams of something
i could not recognize
the look of fear and anguish
in his trembling eyes
the black the red the black
would consume my wandering heart
feelings once between us
so painfully ripped apart
and just when i thought it was over
lid slipped upon the box
one single flower
green brightness
would be the final lock
to close it up so tightly
words poured from lips of red
this was something not sightly
now it is
the end.

------
*laura*


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The following comments are for "The Accident"
by englishgal16

englishgal16&the end...
amatuer writer again speaks...This is good, Yet, I don't think(my opinion)that the end makes for an easy read. Me, I would find a different way to express the last to lines...The entire poem reads well and flows great, yet, the last to lines end to abruptly, this is good, please do not be offended, only giving my input...
~Robinbird~

( Posted by: Robinbird [Member] On: April 1, 2005 )





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