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It's on every
taxed breath
reciept
death

It's in every
word, every manifesto
peddlin,
free wheelin freedom

freedom
as if

As if selling these very
words
will pay,
for America's
Sins

really,
as if........


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The following comments are for "America Sins"
by 0207070

sins
Good one James. I like the subtle change in meaning while the flow still makes sense and all the while the poem still maintains it's theme. Nice work - good message. regards huni.

( Posted by: Huni [Member] On: March 18, 2005 )

Good write
I agree with Huni. I really liked this piece.

But, I think perhaps we have had freedom for too long.

Felicia

( Posted by: FeliciaStone [Member] On: March 19, 2005 )





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