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Pass me by as they go around evaluating what's left of me
Color so faded by now
The colors I bear
Bent down I see my own reflection in the water
And I shudder at the sight
They catch my leaves as they drop in haste
Falling in the water blurring the images and veiling the hideous view

And soon the summer will come to mend my faults
And restore what the winter had taken down

And I'll be patient
I'll wait for the summer
I'll wait for the answers



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The following comments are for "Tree"
by seniorme

Very Moving
This poem is great! I love how closely related it is to the human condition. I felt as if I had fallen in some horrible fate in life and am awaiting to recover. It feels like the times when I look in the mirror and don't recognize myself. What a beautiful tree. Thank you for this!! It is great work!

( Posted by: Serendipity [Member] On: March 9, 2005 )

you writing is getting stronger
Wow, I definitely see growth here seniorme! Compared to some of your previous work, I am happy to see the restraint in your word choice with this poem. Let's me as a reader do some of the heavy work, invests me more in what you are trying to communicate. You even embedded some mystery into it. "Answers"? To which questions I wonder?

( Posted by: wrdekle [Member] On: November 13, 2005 )





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