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False hopes flying high
Connected to ropes dropped from the sky
Wishes never coming true
Threats that we will follow through
Hearts that will be staying broke
Love the game that took my token
You are bogous now to me
like i lived across a sea
Away from you I will be
Because this is so over

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~trish~

dearest lord...thank you for my friends who care, the ones who help me when i have the smallest look of sorrow on my face. <3.


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The following comments are for "Game That Took My Token"
by how do i live with this shame

mmm...
well, here you focused too much on having words that rhyme that it seems that towards the end you'd forgotten about the meaning. The line I am referring to is "you are bogus now to me, like I lived across the sea" other than that it was good.

( Posted by: seniorme [Member] On: March 9, 2005 )





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