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im feeling things
no one else has felt
i am dealing with things
no one else has delt
...at least the people i know
im crying
for no reason
through the winters
snowing season
...and no one i know has done this
i feel my dieing heart
beating through my skin
a tourmentded teenage soul
pulling at me from within
...and no one i know has felt this
changeing colors quickly
watching days move by fast
as they move in diffrent shapes
through all the diffrent glass
...and NO ONE i know has seen this

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~trish~

dearest lord...thank you for my friends who care, the ones who help me when i have the smallest look of sorrow on my face. <3.


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The following comments are for "No One I Know"
by how do i live with this shame

Grammatical errors,
Trish I LOVE poems filled with angst. It is after all the world as we know it. I do like this poem and the message you have coming across. Even your title. Just tighten this with proper spelling.
Whatever you do, keep on writing and let it ALL out. Us older adults have been teen agers as well. I recall many, many times feeling just as this poem says.
I am going to read some of your other poems as well, I find you interesting.
Don't let comments feel personal. It can be hard at your age as well. It is not a personal attack Trish, I want to see you develope this skill. Thank you for sharing with us Trish.
My best to you,
Darlene

( Posted by: Dareva [Member] On: March 6, 2005 )





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