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Collide.

A myriad of images passes before mine eyes
synthesizing, re-minimizing the need to be outside
all i need is here.

The process of thought, simple feedback bounces
attempting to focus the beast before it leaps
as all i need is here.

Completeness, unbridled and unattached to mind-forms
follows the months of constant evaluation -- left brain approves of the right's ideas.
all i need is there.

there is nothing but compacted truth,
so imagines the idealist in retrospection
and all i need is there.

But again, the ability to dream
to perceive non reality, to impress upon my own psyche an emotion
a response worthy of memories, fears and other intelligent criticism.
What's needed lies elsewhere.

It lies within a single fearless free moment of clarity
without distraction and with nothing left to give.
It is the abandonment of importance,
the dream to witness the whole of now
the swirling ecstacy inherent of realization:
what's important is now.

But our curse is to tread forward,
always catching up with the past.

If only all could freeze
we could appreciate existence a bit more
like a living photograph, multidimensional and full of beauty
coloring the inner worlds we inhabit beyond imagination.

So breathe a little,
relax and enjoy all you've had,
let it go, and witness the next memory in the making,
for this is life.
this is life.

c.a. todd 4/25/2002


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The following comments are for "poetry"
by phylum sinter

phylum sinter
Really good,i liked the "catching up with the past" part. keep posting!

( Posted by: Vamp eyes [Member] On: June 16, 2002 )

thanks for the encouragement...
Thanks alot -- new here and appreciate the kind words.

( Posted by: phylum sinter [Member] On: June 17, 2002 )

to phylum sinter
Interesting poem, very nice free verse, if a bit hard to read aloud as a poem. It's leaning toward prose.

The last verse a I think is comparatively weak, and slightly irresponcible. You suddenly jump from a sense of togetherness to "you" using some cliched phrase. The structure of the poemm is lost there.

The line "follows the months of constant evaluation -- left brain approves of the right's ideas." Is fine but I think you can rework it to sound more eloquent.

You did a great job in using words to illustrate the points. The lines makes perfect sense and conveys a sense of a lovely perspective.

( Posted by: Furius [Member] On: June 17, 2002 )

dizorn
Cant help but see the lamb influence here...seems like an aftermorning looming breath on the face of a sleeping love. very "high" from the start, glistening impact drips off this one.

( Posted by: Criom [Member] On: October 15, 2002 )





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