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Can anyone hear me I'm screaming so loud
Within myself they can't see how
I live within these walls of pain
Ever so lonely can I stay sane
He is demanding controlling he'd be
Telling me his way is all there can be
I must obey him and I must bow down
He just consumes me I soon will drown
Can anyone hear me I beg of you
To hear my pleading my life is almost through
Just one sole person to reach to me
Will save my life and set me free
The days go by I live in fear
Waiting and watching emotions to clear
Just one brief moment for him to trust
For pure survival it is a must
I have my dreams and wishes too
He never listened he never knew
Upon this earth I know I'll stand
If you reach out and grab my hand
I know that life can be so cruel
I feel that I've been such a fool
But as I ponder my life today
My Lord upon my knees I pray
I ask of You my Lord to guide
Me through this pain so I won't die
For in your light I plan to stay
No matter how I feel today



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The following comments are for "I Will Survive"
by Sheena

Been There
I really liked your poem. I have been there in the past myself and wondered if I too would survive. Unfortunate so many people in this world have to deal with abuse. Excellent read it touched my heart!

( Posted by: LadyKimberly [Member] On: March 3, 2005 )

I agree
Can anyone hear me I'm screaming so loud

What a powerful line to start with! I agree with the comments made on this piece. Although punctuation would make it easier, I had no problem navigating through it as is.

Thanks for posting.

Felicia

( Posted by: feliciastone [Member] On: March 3, 2005 )

Punctuation
Thanks! I write what I write unfortunatly I am no good at punctuation and editing I would love to have someone help me out on that if at all possible.

( Posted by: Sheena [Member] On: March 4, 2005 )





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