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The waves ran high today,
For here.
Sibilant surf song raging
Ripe with frenzied foam.
Pounding.
The waves relentlessly
Washing away my
Sand scripted poetry.
Just a name.
So...
Steal what I have written!
Draw it back sea bound
Suck it down and in
Toss it windward
On dolphins plumed spray.
Mist of life.

Lying on the night damp sand
Fragments of yesterdays
Shells and dreams
Molded to my flesh.
A mosaic
Of hips and coquina
Of sand and beach glass.
Eyes closed to the
Wash of sun spilled heat and light.
Lips, tongue lashed
To taste what clings so close.

Breath of life
Salt of my earth
The sea calms
Gently swells
Heaving
Like the rise and fall
Of my life.


------
*enters gently, smiling*


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The following comments are for "Beach Art"
by ADannon

Another good one, ADannon
The alliteration and consonance in practically every line of this poem is incredible. You have a great handle on the language and that's shown very clearly in your work. I like the imagery of writing in the sand and allowing it to just wash away, steal it into the ocean and the mist of life. You've got a good sense of repetition and when to do it. All in all I think this is very good. I give you a 9.
-Casey

( Posted by: shefallssoftly [Member] On: February 26, 2005 )

Thanks~
shefallssoftly~
Thank you for your generous post. I'm glad you liked this one~

penelope~
Thank you for reading. I love the sea as well. Most of my poems rhyme and I do prefer that as well. Glad you found this pleasing in spite of that lack~ *s*

( Posted by: ADannon [Member] On: March 9, 2005 )





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