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Two old women came to me
While I sat beside the sea.
Smiling faces introduced.
In a heartbeat they seduced.
With genteel ways they said hello.
I smiled back, as those things go.

"I'm Zabella, this is Rain
We've come to walk the beach again."

Belongings handed safe to me
They set off walking toward the sea.
Rain as fragile as a breath
Walking arm in arm with death.
Fine white hair in disarray,
Age soft eyes took in the day.

Zabella gently took her hand,
Led her down the wind swept strand.
Leaning close like young girls will,
Voices soft, kept secrets spill.
Taking in the days sweet graces
Glorious smiles adorned their faces

Wise with all their lessons learned,
After a distance they both turned.
With feeble steps returned to me,
To where I sat beside the sea.
Forgetting illness, though in pain,
The time a blessing.

A day for Rain.


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*enters gently, smiling*


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The following comments are for "A Day for Rain"
by ADannon

What a melody
That was beautiful. Very beautiful. The movement of the peace was very melodic to me. In fact, i would like to write some music for this poem if you would let me (i am a singer songwriter) I wish my poetry style had gone down the musical path..alas it remains freeform..im used to it now. I hope you post more soon

Ahh look...its raining today..

TheFerryman.

( Posted by: TheFerryman [Member] On: March 2, 2005 )

*smile*
Ferryman~
I am pleased you liked this so well. I am a singer/songwriter too though my poetry is just turning in that direction. Please feel free to write somthing for this, would hope that you would share what you do with it~ *s*

( Posted by: ADannon [Member] On: March 9, 2005 )





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