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Still he comes with a whisper
All his demons before him,
And he begs consolation
As he stands at my door.

In his eyes there’s an angel
And an ocean of sorrow,
While I scan his horizon
For the opposite shore.

Shadowed smile curving tender,
Keeps on pulling me deeper.
It will brook no resistance
As my door opens wide.

Manic arms reach to hold me,
Lips devour me, willing.
He completely consumes me,
There is nowhere to hide.

So I dive in his ocean,
Rise and fall with the currents.
And I sing like a siren
Till his pain melts away.

The man sleeps like a baby,
Steals my heart for his pillow,
While I float in the shallows
Holding darkness at bay.


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*enters gently, smiling*


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The following comments are for "Floating on the Tides of Sorrow"
by ADannon

Lovely moment
What do you call this structure,the 7-7-7-6 syllables in each stanza? Anyway, I like this piece a lot. Not what I was expecting when I read the title, but hey, that's not a bad thing. I like the transition from wearied resistance to complete consummation. Quite good.
-Casey

( Posted by: shefallssoftly [Member] On: February 24, 2005 )

Casey~
Thanks for reading~ *s* As to the name of the form, I don't know that there is one......it is just the measure that came as I wrote. Usually something in the poem writes itself.

( Posted by: ADannon [Member] On: March 9, 2005 )





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