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Lost in the monotony...
You and I melt into we.
My thoughts form without their frame.
Keep cold skin to numb your pain.
Took self, with your slow caper.
Insight's sentences taper..
Dull mutes original will...
Stuck, but longing remains still.

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The following comments are for "Not a Feel Good"
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This poem is so soft. One can truly melt into it. The word "but" however, really juts out from the last line.

I like it, the lines are well crafted.

( Posted by: Furius [Member] On: June 12, 2002 )

I had a little trouble discerning the meaning, but I prefer poetry that requires a little work. It gives it much more substance. That's not to say I figured out it's meaning, I didn't. But I hate poetry that's obvious. I'd rather have something to think about and a little room to intrepret or mold it to my own meaning.



( Posted by: Richard Dani [Member] On: June 12, 2002 )

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