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The light catches it
Crystaline and purely formed
Exquisite sorrow

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I've been trying to change my avatar for four years...


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The following comments are for "Tear"
by frenchie

Tear...
Well...My bright idea to rate all I read because
it's only fair. well, it's really not. Here I'm behind the scenes having to give you a point because I have personal feelings about the write, so really you should have got a 10, like most excellent for me! This was a good write, a
very good one for you, my opinion only. Honestly I did deduct for Jack White, My ex's name was Jack White...~Robin~

( Posted by: Robinbird [Member] On: February 20, 2005 )

What?
Um... thanks for the compliments... and the rating, I think... I meant Jack White, the guitarist... I'm not sure what you mean by "very good for you" Right...

( Posted by: frenchie [Member] On: February 20, 2005 )

tear
I like the expressions and the way of how you put the tears in words..
nice one
this is the first time to read you and I hope to read more of your haikus or works in general..

regards
fairgrace

( Posted by: fairgrace [Member] On: February 20, 2005 )

my first "Frenchie"...
Frenchie, I must admit not having read you before. I enjoyed "Tear" and will look for more of your work. Really liked "Exquisite sorrow"..I no longer rate posts, but found this a worthy effort.

Robert William

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: February 20, 2005 )

frenchie, good question?
I read my comment, sometimes, I don't come across like I'd like to, oh well... You gathered, I liked this write...( had I not had a fashback of Jack Whites face) I retracted, gave you a 10. Back to Jack White, I new who you meant, just messing with ya'. To be able to cry and have that exqusite release is a part of us for a reason, everything about this write fits,
I gave on the rate books, and a 10 right here.
If you would tell me more about this, inspired,
how long it took, just noisy stuff...~Robin~

( Posted by: Robinbird [Member] On: February 20, 2005 )

Noisy Stuff
I don't cry often, but when I do it is such a pleasant change from my normal self, even if it is in a moment of extreme sadness. Just being able to release is beauty in itself. I caught a glance at myself in the mirror after a rare crying spell. My eyelashes were wet, my eyes were glistening, and on my cheek rested a tear. A ray of sunlight passed across my window, and for a moment it was irridescent. Inspiration comes at the oddest times for me.

( Posted by: frenchie [Member] On: February 21, 2005 )

Frenchie's "inspiration"
Perfect. That's called poetry. Art. Capturing a moment and making it memorable. Keep writing.

Robert William

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: February 21, 2005 )





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