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Reflecting me,
crazy words leave
my lips undesired
not here, not there
just words uttered
like Muppets moved
in plays you wish you’d
never seen.
Cold as
ice falling to
rekindle
burnt dunes in
blazing desires.
Remove the veil
covering a masterpiece
light your cigarette-
drown-
surrender to insanity
disowned.

Feb. 17, 2005

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"Your pain is the breaking of the shell that encloses your understanding" Khalil Gibran, The Prophet




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The following comments are for "Reflecting"
by Serendipity

reflecting
I read this twice and I manage to read it again and again..I feel everytime I read it,I figure out more and more explanation for what behind the words..
well done..
All the best
fairgrace

( Posted by: fairgrace [Member] On: February 19, 2005 )

Wow...Egypt
Hey Fairgrace,
We Egyptians must be talented...since I am part Egyptian!! Thanks for your lovely comments!
Mona

( Posted by: Serendipity [Member] On: February 19, 2005 )

serendipity's reflecting
How true.. sometimes words are inadequate even if they are your only tool. I like the style you chose for this poem, the diction and rhythm combine to create the same disjointed cacaphony that thoughts tend to have when one feels helpless. It's really very good.
-Casey

( Posted by: shefallssoftly [Member] On: February 19, 2005 )

umm...
well, not wanting to rush to comment on this one. give me a while to digest it!!lol

( Posted by: seniorme [Member] On: February 20, 2005 )

reflecting
i agree totally with fairgrace, you need to read this at least a couple of times to get the true meaning of the poem. it discusses a simple subject with such loveliness shown in how you drew pictures to describe the feeling with such accruacy. i'll give it a 10.

( Posted by: seniorme [Member] On: February 23, 2005 )

reflecting me
mona it's been along time since i last loged on and the first thing i did was to check out your latest work as i do miss you terribly.
it's so amazing how you always seem to so accurately and beautifully express how you feel which is always so close to how i feel, i really loved this piece and you remain to bedazzle me with your words you are so talented ya mona.

( Posted by: abi [Member] On: July 2, 2005 )





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