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Look at it for a minute
Your face is on the surface side of its reflection
Below the surface lies the truth
It echoes
The deep voice from within
The real sight of the cores
The sounds of repressed aches and woes
The wrinkle of souls passing time
The promising plans still resting in the mind
The actual taste of the facts ,painful and sore
Of which we ignore or feign to be blind
In our life they are abandoned and torn
But still preserved inside..




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The sweet is never as sweet without the sour, and I know the sour which allows me to appreciate the sweet.


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The following comments are for "Reflection"
by fairgrace

reflections of fairgrace
I like this. "The wrinkle of souls passing time." Nice. "The promising plans still resting in the mind." I use "the" as little as possible. But that's my style. Minimalist, I suppose. I may have used "torn," in place of "tore."

Enjoyed the read..
RW

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: February 18, 2005 )

Thanks Bobby
Thank you Bobby for reading my poem
I appreciate and value your advices and will change tore to torn..

Thanks again

( Posted by: fairgrace [Member] On: February 19, 2005 )

Reflection
I like the emphasis you keep putting on what we are by showing it in different phrases. I have a particular liking for "the deep voice from within", and "the promising plans still resting in the mind".

( Posted by: Dfortyseven [Member] On: May 9, 2005 )





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