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Thoughts run thick
Full of tension
Bursting with questions,
I'm eager for the words to come
Sing with me
The song we do not know
The words will come
Red passion in your lips
Will spill them out
The desperation in your kiss
Breaks the floodgates
Shall I say it
Or will it be you?
It's coming, it must
The words will come
So sing with me
Shall I say it
Or will it be you?
The words will come
They come, they come


------
She falls softly down from towering pedastools...


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The following comments are for "Forgotten Songs"
by shefallssoftly

Nice words!
Wow... nice words, wonderful feeling! hope to read more! Good luck Casie!! Do i make it right? hehe...

( Posted by: Clark [Member] On: February 20, 2005 )

on the tip of the tongue
will you say them or he will..:)
so sentimental expressions..seweet

regards
fairgrace

( Posted by: fairgrace [Member] On: February 20, 2005 )

Thanks Clark, Fairgrace
Clark-- Thanks so much for taking an interest in my work. This is a much older piece and there are newer ones coming, so you'll get to see the changes in my style.
Fairgrace-- I'm glad you like it, the goal is to entertain, right? Thanks for going through my work, I appreciate that you like it.
-Casey

( Posted by: shefallssoftly [Member] On: February 20, 2005 )

I like your naked emotion
I like the way your words are so simple, so honest, so easy to understand. This is good writing.

Felicia

( Posted by: feliciastone [Member] On: February 21, 2005 )

Reverse mimickry?
I've noticed that my writing tends to be very simple, which I've always found odd because my favorite poets are the metaphysical poets. Somehow I've completely inverted John Donne's style and made it my own. Thanks for the comment!
-Casey

( Posted by: shefallssoftly [Member] On: February 21, 2005 )

the goal
Basiclly..the goal is to get a lesson or benefit..of cource there is a part where one can entertain himself to read some works..but not for me..I love to read for the sake of gaining benefits ,lessons and even more dictions ...as much as possible

all the best
fairgrace
[Hiba]

( Posted by: fairgrace [Member] On: February 21, 2005 )

wonderful
This is wonderful, the words are so touching. Thank you for this!! Mona

( Posted by: Serendipity [Member] On: February 21, 2005 )

Fairgrace and Serendipity
My apologies to both of you for not responding sooner, but thanks you both for your kind words. Fairgrace-- I'm glad you like the simple style I take on now and then. I generally just try to pervay an emotion honestly without confusing my reader.
Serendipity- Thank you, I appreciate that you like this poem. I nearly didn't post it- I'm not happy with it, but now I'm glad I did.
-Casey

( Posted by: shefallssoftly [Member] On: February 24, 2005 )

flow
i loved reading this i really like how it flowed

( Posted by: DiviJordison [Member] On: June 18, 2007 )





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