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The arctic blue sky of a winter morn,
Touches my soul, longing to love adorn.
Reaching for miles it embraces all eternity,
Looking to Heaven reaffirming my sanity.

An unbroken sky created in perfection,
Another chance to peek at God's reflection.
Might I steal a glimpse to be content,
For just an interlude my pain relent?

Purity found without a scarring cloud,
Walking beneath it's pure shroud.
The sky can heal by it's artic blue,
To these rare days, I dread my adieu.

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The following comments are for "Winter Sky"
by nelson

winter sky
I am too much grabbed to kind of poetry which is full of natural elements and beauty

thanks for sharing that with us..and hope to read more of you..

( Posted by: fairgrace [Member] On: February 20, 2005 )

Another nice one, nelson
Just a few quick points-- artic = arctic, I believe (not that it's of much matter.) Also, some of your speak seems a bit broken up with tense problems or missing modifiers. This can usually give a feeling of hecticness to a poem, but this seems like it wants to be calm. ll. 2 and ll. 8 are where I see that. Anyway, I like your rhyme scheme, you did a good job of not making it cliche. Beyond that, the argument you make in the poem is stunning. I like the idea that those days which you understand God's work just a little better are days when you don't want to meet god. It's a beautiful notion. Your imagery is, as always, incredible.

( Posted by: shefallssoftly [Member] On: February 20, 2005 )

Thank you both for your comments and advice.

( Posted by: nelson [Member] On: February 20, 2005 )

thank you for your comments. i am glad it made couse for re-reading.

( Posted by: nelson [Member] On: February 22, 2005 )

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