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Author's Note:
This is my most accurate translation of A Toothpaste Model's Poem,http://www.lit.org/view/23448written by Peter Paulino. Posted upon his request




Tula ng Isang

My gums are long
like willows in may
they hold cigarettes
selfless kings dream big
like the buildings of Kuala Lumpur
and the skyscrapers of Andaman peninsula.

Remove that calculus from my enamel!
Sing Kumbalaya while eating a shish kabob!
My ma-jong partner flatulates
and that is harmful
to the aristocratic posture of my nose!

Cool chocolate
Bought on layaway
is akin to king's nectar
from Hindu meadows!
It sounds like the Nakapagmumogians language:
metamorphosis is Ylan-Ylang flavored coffee
drunk face to face
with a madam made up as Magda
smoking Marlboro butts.
Thus, bake it!
Buy a map-a-drag!
Sidney is a pugnacious thorpe
akin to Pusan's malady of flood.

Bake it! Kiss it!
Hindus lament:
absorb all that pummeling,
The Piñata doll among brusque nerds
Dyed as a name, big in May?
Samantha, lay with me, nag-a-lala-bling-bing!
Dyed in mollusk muscle
And sang kissing!
Bake it,
Bah! Hindus?

Magpies and man sing songs gay
Walls hum with din Sybian,
"Da Hill" is cigarette-paper thin kite flying,
at an an Image Pageant- of Mohicans
I sang "Sandals Poor and Cold"
That song is my mate.
Walls not,
walls sang quantum pangs
that the magpies bang into while unhinged.

(Indian Nile alarm is bad breath Palo Verde)
Eurovision hit "puti-puti"
is a kingpin show on TV!)




Comments

The following comments are for "Tula"
by Teflon

Tef's "quantum pangs"...
Cerebral, lysergic like libation for the entertainment of the noncomformist..Or maybe just a playful exercise. "Hindus lament"..Indeed.

"Qauntum pangs.."..Torment of the cosmic dust (self)... A magnetic moment of...

Pleasure,
Robert William

see you at Wf...

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: February 13, 2005 )

Bobby@sybiansongs.com
I can't take the occupational contemplation seriously. Istrained all my Tagalog skills and these oscillations just happened to come out.

www.seeyouatwritingforums.net

( Posted by: Teflon [Member] On: February 13, 2005 )

Teflon's Tula
I would say this is very entertaining and my stomach hurt the first time I saw and read this. Thanks Tef!

( Posted by: PETERPAULINO [Member] On: February 13, 2005 )

someday...
I like what I get

( Posted by: drsoos [Member] On: February 15, 2005 )

It's also a city
Tula is a quiet city of a moderate size south of Moscow, Russia. There, of course, they worship Pushkin, who, in turn, exhausted his life worshipping Byron. Byron, in turn, worshipped the fair Haydee, who, until John Belushi, was the most prominent Albanian, and a lot prettier!!!

( Posted by: Teflon [Member] On: February 16, 2005 )

of cryptic communiques
..and geo-gyrations

Netflo..

ciao

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: March 28, 2011 )

Gyro
someone's been fooling with my gyro compass. Flying low, to the nap of the earth, avoiding flak, and can't see the certain fairy on my nose art. You can, though. Good luck all ye lit orgs. No comment, either way LOL

( Posted by: Teflon [Member] On: March 30, 2011 )

of imps and nymphs
I hope this communique finds you and your family happy and healthy.

stealth is sometimes part of valor..

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: March 30, 2011 )

Gyroscopes
My Daddy introduced me, as a 9 year old child, to the fascinating world of gyroscopes. We played with his for hours every day. He installed them, as part of autopilots, in B-29's at the Boeing plant in Wichita, KS during WW-II.

What he had was a very expensive gyroscope, I often wonder what happened to it when he died. Kids today are really missing out by not having these things today. They are magic.

( Posted by: veebdosa [Member] On: March 30, 2011 )

Tula bula vee boli
Ron,
Did you even bother to read the poem(s), or is this another one of those cases where you just troll the thread?

Netflo,
To fully appreciate this, you've really got to read Peter's piece first.

medallion

ciao

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: March 30, 2011 )

Even a Cave Man could do it
I was responding to his comment, not the poem.
Quack Aflack!

( Posted by: veebdosa [Member] On: March 30, 2011 )

Much adieu
Okay, Bobby, I read Mucit, but got nothing to say about it.

( Posted by: veebdosa [Member] On: March 30, 2011 )

borden
Now, that is some connection between Lizzy and Doolittle!

I have had to make real hard decisions with resale of Borden sights and gyros from old US torpedoes. You'd be amazed to know what Iran has been up to with these things considering the embargo. I have taught all my students (including the debutante here) art appreciation through Nose art. It's the best, though. What an era!

( Posted by: Teflon [Member] On: March 30, 2011 )

lost in transliteration
This is one of those cases where it helps to know the background story..both of the characters/represented personas and the social context within Lit.org, circa 2004-2005.

Having said that, by showing qualities of unique perspective and creativity/originality, this offering still stands on its own.

..of "sybian" nature..indeed.

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: March 30, 2011 )

I am slipping
again. I promised everyone to stay away from my old haunts, also to keep the peace at home.

Please don't worry about my ex-GF, she's all fun. You know how teenagers are nowadays.

I do love you all and remember you fondly:
Pen, Williams, Samvak, Windchime, PeterPaulino, Fairplay and his brother, everyone!

I am peace with myself and can't wait to sneak a peek at her exposee that Tori has promised everyone. I do really want to read it. and for now, before I have a real 10-34, 10-70 or 10-38, I go 10-3, 10-7, 10-12. Roger.

( Posted by: Teflon [Member] On: March 30, 2011 )

Nymph speaks:
The above comment is a little bit off and presumptive. Sammie is the greatest artistic inspiration I have ever had - and since I remain uncorrected - it looks like my teacher is reclining in his armchair - smiling, approvingly!

Sam knows, like the other 6 men, 3 women, and my husbands, that I am interested in someone else.
I think that Sam has also gotten over me – from my own blog intro to the super-honest and yummy story about our affair, the intro that he loves so much - starting with this:

"…The Master and Lolita. Or, Goosebumps, Teddy Bears and Land-O-Lakes. Or, how I was repossessed, born again, reborn, resuscitated, rejuvenated, reanimated and rehabilitated. Sam is not a fake name. I would never change his name to anything else. I respect him just like a wife is supposed to honor her husband. This is the name of the man who is more important than my ex. Because he repossessed me from the cloying memories of my dingy marriage. He re-deflowered me into the womanhood, as I should have been in the first place. He returned me to the playful girlhood of Bais Yakov, and of other phases in my life, I shall always respect him and honor him. He told me I can use this short name anywhere I want. Our unforgettable song- Memories of Green, by Vangelis."

So Sammie is an important literary figure in my life, - but he knows very well, and is very much a man about it, feeling no jealousy – about the fact that I have always-always loved my brother.

And Sammie always taught me that art and literature should never be home to technological, anatomical (re. in Windchime comment above), and other object-descriptive nouns. They are simply too simplistic, non-imagistic, and not yummy.

( Posted by: VickieSALT [Member] On: March 30, 2011 )





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