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Traditional windows, Foursquare panes
White wooden crosses,and black weather vanes.
There's a thousand stories,when I look back
On the miles I walked, down the railroad tracks.

Dirty foursquare panes, made from cheap clear glass
Don't ever get washed, till the very last.
No one ever sees, from the outside in
My checkerboard tablecloth,worn through thin.

Whitewashed fences fell down, on a bed of weeds
There's a girl next door, says she's got needs.
Red and white memories, have a blue, blue stain
Washed my mind yesterday, turned it again.

Take any story, that I could have told
Wake it up tomorrow, when I'm not so old.
Push all my snapshot words, aside like dirt
There's fallout in her yard, she's the one hurt.

Traditional windows, broken panes
White wooden crosses, black hearted veins.
There's a thousand stories, when I look back
You're the one I loved, and that's a fact.

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The following comments are for "Dirty Windows"
by williamhill

will: tappin, not rappin,on ..
..the window pane...Just when I was warming to Will "Big-Gangsta-Thrill" Hill, we get "Over the Hill Will"...All kidding aside, I enjoyed the story and the feel you conveyed here. Fresh, original lyrics are not easy to create. It looks easy on paper, when done well...Well done.

Robert William

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: February 8, 2005 )

four square
This piece is a toe tapper. You can hear the music while reading it. Nicely done!

( Posted by: poesandpoetry [Member] On: February 10, 2005 )

Mr.WH,I see...
I wish I could not not see this, my picture I catch as I read...Hey, some of the hard times were good, not so good others..Friends...

( Posted by: Robinbird [Member] On: February 15, 2005 )

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