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Aim for the moon
Your eyes the bow
And arrows, your tears
And miss completely
shooting the flowerbeds!

crystal face I kiss
tongue tastes like sweet cold rain
I fall into pond

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The following comments are for "Moon, Neohaiku"
by peterpaulino

Peter: Playfully exquisite
Enjoyed this piece. Peter, You are quite the wordsmith. Bravo.

Robert William

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: February 8, 2005 )

Peter's back!
Hooray -- Peter's posting again! I've missed your work, my friend.

Another exquisitely-crafted, playful, sensitive gem from you. I will repeat what I have said before: you have a gift for capturing imagery and emotion in a few words, especially when dealing with romantic themes. You're the sort of poet we all wish we could be -- so that we could woo potential lovers, of course!

( Posted by: Viper9 [Member] On: February 8, 2005 )

Bob, Vipe, Lucie
Bob, thank you - wordsmith is such an ambitious title for me :)

Viper, lol woo poetential lovers? I hope my own poems could work for me. :) Thank you.

Lucie, of course you know this poem. I reposted only because I omited the punctuations and named it neohaiku which I hope Tef would approve of. Thanks. :)

( Posted by: peterpaulino [Member] On: February 8, 2005 )

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