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Concrete towers block
early sunlight; in shadows,
homeless clean their nails.

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"No, the was no way out and no one can imagine what the evenings in prisons are like"
Camus, from L'étranger



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The following comments are for "Toronto Morning, September '96"
by commercialends

I seen it.
I think it is very perspicuous and its punchline is well-delivered.

I think this haiku captures the way I see the Canada's Socialist system - I do believe the homeless own vanity tables and log cabins on Georgian Bay.

Regards,

Teflo.net

( Posted by: Teflon [Member] On: February 9, 2005 )

Haiku
Very nice piece. And shows that haiku can be found in any setting.

Also, I must thank you. I clicked onto your member page and followed one of your comments to Joel Murray's "White Space", which kicked some serious ass. Otherwise, I'd never have read it.

P.S. to Teflon: Geez, you're all heart. Them damn lucky Canadian homeless commies.

( Posted by: gomarsoap [Member] On: February 9, 2005 )

@Gomar: Can-do
This haiku reminded me specifically of 3 homeless men:
one an eccentric ex-professor living on the streets of Ann Arbor, refusing mental drugs and owning a mailbox as well as a mint-condition Benz in storage;

a leader of a Can-Am homeless group, himself long time ago having lived in the huge, abandoned Detroit Railroad Station, also having started a web site replete with e-mail accounts for his fellow vagrant citizens;

a younger homeless man who played on the same soccer team with Pele, having coached Toronto high schools, for the past 5-6 years enjoying the unlimited welcome of St. Andrew shelter in Ann Arbor, breakfasting at the glitzy student cafes, impressing wanna-be writers with his mastery of 58 languages.

Aren't homeless cool?

Teflonsoap.com

( Posted by: Teflon [Member] On: February 10, 2005 )





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