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wrote this in government class after a quiz. been writing lots of poetry recently, i blame eminem and cormega...

nonchalantly stolling through a refreshing acid rain
it slowly eats away my skin but i don't mind the pain

my shoes smoke and dissolve as i step in puddles
my hair and clothes all gone, the least of my troubles

flesh and muscles exposed, a trail of blood in my wake
pain well past the point that any normal human could take

bones showing through, my guts spill, sizzle on the sidewalk
ghostly faces stare at me through pitted windows in shock

now a thinning skeleton, i stare the reaper in his eye
an open challenge to take my soul, but i know he won't try

it's a daily game i play, i'm no longer afraid of death
my body can be destroyed, but the iron will is left

now the clouds break and reveal the rising sun
a new day begins, and my new life has begun

And another thing is, no matter how much you think you love someone, you'll step back when a pool of their blood edges too close.

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The following comments are for "AcidRain"
by direb0y

Great poem!
This was a good read. A bit more... hmm... gory than I usually like, but the overall message was good. It could almost be song lyrics, too.

( Posted by: SWHCgirl [Member] On: June 5, 2002 )


Wonderful! I will never think about rain the same way again. I really enjoyed reading this, gore and all.


( Posted by: Drastine [Member] On: June 9, 2002 )

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