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Note: this song is totally random freewriting and i kinda liked it so i decided to post it. uhm, yeah, i've been yelled at a bit lately for having a lot of repeating lines in my pieces...those of you that dislike that...you're gonna hate this. well, this isn't a traditional jimmyandhisrocket piece so i feel like it needs an intro. uhm, basically its like a psychological horror movie or something in song form. I've always been fascinated by the way time passes so quickly and blankly during sleep so that was a bit of inspiration too.

"Out Cold and Unaware"

You are sleeping
You are sleeping
You are sleeping

And round and round and round
The clocks hands they go
And round and round and round
The clocks hands they go
And you don't know
You'll never know because...

You are sleeping
You are sleeping
You are sleeping

Out cold and unaware
Vulnerable for me to stare
Time passing you buy
But you really don't realize
Becuase you're sleeping
Where did the time go?
You're sleeping
Where did my money go?
You were sleeping
They came clothing black as coal
You were sleeping
All of your possesions they stole
While you were sleeping

Sleeping...
Sleeping...
Sleeping...
Sweet dreams...

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jimmy g--do you see my heart? it is lying on the floor.


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The following comments are for "Out Cold and Unaware"
by JimmyAndHisRocket

Out Cold and Unaware
I like, particularly the second-to-last stanza (*/you were sleeping).

Nice & very emotive.

As for the repeating lines thing - stick with it. If it's the way you want to write then keep it going and make it exactly how you want it to be.

Jonathan.

( Posted by: JonnyT [Member] On: February 2, 2005 )

Me Likey It Good
(I have trouble coming up with subject lines. Sorry)

I liked this quite a lot. Repetition doesn't bother me. It can be used well, as Nine Inch Nails and U2 both demonstrate time and again.

This reminds me of the song, "Counting Bodies Like Sheep to the Rhythm of the War Drums," by A Perfect Circle. Is it about the same thing?

Great work.

( Posted by: Viper9 [Member] On: February 2, 2005 )

jrocket's "sleeping"...
It's not easy coming up with catchy, original, universal lyrics..I know!...You are on to something here..Keep at it.

B

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: February 2, 2005 )





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