The following comments are for "Is My Car Leaking Fluid??" by LinnieRed
Is My Car Leaking Fluid
Gosh, I really like it. I'm no haiku expert but I know in their traditional Japanese form, they usually described nature. Well, the city is now part of nature. And you could hardly write a more unified poem.
I, too, believe that writing should get down to the real. But for me, concepts are almost as real as people and parking lots.
Posted by: seanspacey [Member] On: February 2, 2005
sean: Glad you like the "Leak"
Thanks for commenting!
Backstory (not that you asked for it!): It was in the parking lot of a Big Lots store, of all places! (Closeout discount store, sometimes known as Odd Lots. Specialty: cheap crap, but sometimes it's really good crap.) It was beautiful, like an abalone stream, and it just kept going and going! I couldn't take my eyes off it, and I wished I'd had a digital camera with me. It's the first time in my life I actually scrambled for the only "scribble on" and "scribble with" I could find: a Post-It note pad from my purse, and the pencil in my glove compartment, just to try to capture in words what I couldn't capture visually.
Of course, I also had the ambivalence of wondering if it was safe to get onto the interstate. For all I knew, this thing of beauty represented the lifeblood of some vital component of my car, completely drained! (It wasn't.)
After I got home, tweaked the wording a bit, and posted the 'ku, I wasn't sure I'd done it justice. Glad you dug it. Not my favorite work, but it captured a moment.
Now, aren't you sorry you said anything? Don't get me started - you know how I get! ; )
Posted by: LinnieRed [Member] On: February 2, 2005
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