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sucking on the spider in my brain, but it's just a stain, not a creepy-crawling through my cortex drains; dreaming about that spider in my head, but it's not, and it's simply dead, so i shift into fluid strains of soda in color, but the palette of the parlour is pallor and grey, so no, not today.

chanting that mantra sixty two times, but it just doesn't get any easier as each time passes into the next so dull; damn that silence you call meditation, when we both know it's the three of us ignoring each other for fashion and style, but i'm a mile high in the sky, and i don't pay attention or care either way, so no, the world won't fall apart today.

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The following comments are for "today (high versus low sea)"
by verve

Someone is in to "The Raven"! I don't think you have copied the man, but rather taken this form as your own. Great job! Madness in the second stanza stands out. Sweet piece.

( Posted by: Dante29 [Member] On: August 17, 2004 )

What? There's no Poe influence in this at all. Heh. And if there does happen to be, it's purely coincidental.

That's why I felt compelled to comment, 'cause I really don't understand yours. :P

I'd be interested in your take on this.

( Posted by: verve [Member] On: August 17, 2004 )

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