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in the pyrex future, it's nothing: anything but that or anywhere but here, and over there, it's even a little bleaker than what we had the stamina to imagine, imagine that; it's a box with a story to tell, so why doesn't anyone listen to that perfect neon monotone? but it's just a hat made from ether, disappearing.

were it a dream of methylphenidate? we can't tell, so now, creep quiet and ghost down the spiral stair with many muffled voices, our whispers receding into hair; and yeah, you were once so fair, but of time, the mad hatter came to dinner: it rained etheric teardrops.



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The following comments are for "of ether and neon"
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methylphenidate = ritalin, right?
and ritalin/adderall = amphetamine = speed, right?

Or am I reading into this too much?

either way, I like it =)

( Posted by: direb0y [Member] On: May 31, 2002 )

you have talent
Every once in a while, I look at one your poems and I always come to the same conclusion. You have a flair for writing but you intentionally write poems that sound cool but have no real content. Or, conceivably, you have some really obscure, profound symbolism that would make your poems meaningful if someone studied them hard enough. But what are the chances of that?

( Posted by: Seanspacey [Member] On: May 31, 2002 )





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