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As the volcanos are erupting,
The world is flailing down.
Many people are corupting,
as evil takes the crown.
Everybody has a yearning,
and the world is losing sight,
but as everyone is learning,
Two wrongs dont make a write.

We've got to band together,
if we do we will succed,
and finally stop this terror,
and I wont have to plead.
The world will be fine,
and there will be no hate,
Nobody will say , "mine mine mine!"
and I could walk right through the gate.



ęKeaghan Townsend
2002

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I want to be in another place
I hate when you say you dont understand
( You'll see it's not meant to be)
I want to be in the Energy, not with the Enemy
A place for my head
"A place for my head"-Linkin Park




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The following comments are for "Hate off life"
by Ken Trema

nice
well stated. i liked the walk through the gate part keep posting

( Posted by: Vamp Eyes [Member] On: May 31, 2002 )

to Ken Trema
I like the second stanza better, that one deserves at least a 8. The first one has a really good conept but started off kind of weak because there is that hesistancy before the eruption of the volcanoes.

One more thing, keeping a consistant rhyme theme in one poem is a good idea otherwise it breaks off, which is not a good thing since the idea in the stanza is definitely interconnected.

( Posted by: Furius [Member] On: June 13, 2002 )





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