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Temptation

I cant help but feel the sway,
I cant help but want to go to you,
to the many, to give into my lust.
how is it Iím bent to lose myself

Temptation

Iím just like the rest
despicable and as easily thrown,
by an empty complement
by someone who says they care

Temptation

its not like I expect it
its not like I want this
its to hard to let go
fall into the beautiful letdown

Temptation

I feel so cold,
there arms donít hold me
I feel you under my skin
scratching at an already hardened heart

This Temptation

its not love anymore
its not the lust of sex
its not these bodies
its something more I want to feel




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*the present is just a pleasant interruption of this past...*


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The following comments are for "Tempt me"
by Angelwithapast

Re: temptation
I like your style and form of presentation. "to hard" should be "too hard" but that could be nothing more than a typo. And "there arms" should be "their arms". A thought provoking subject. We are all tempted in some way. It's not a problem to be tempted. Giving in to temptation is ... more often than not.

( Posted by: Gramma [Member] On: January 30, 2005 )

aww thanx
yay thanx..my typos are really bad *bows* i am the typo queen....oh and that last part you wrote "It's not a problem to be tempted. Giving in to temptation is ... more often than not." i really like that..very profound

( Posted by: Angelwithapast [Member] On: February 1, 2005 )





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