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I tried so hard
This isnít how it was supposed to end
Now precious memories
Useless pieces inside of me

So what do you think
Just a toy
Play thing that will go away
Use me all up till the last drop

Thereís just one thing you missed
Iím not a girl to fall down
Haunted hearts
They learn to heal

Why should I hold on to you
In the end Iím stronger then
Little boy games
A mind is stronger then moving hands

Passing me over
Used up toy doesnít need love
Foolish thoughts there
No I wont play this card

Offer friendship
A pity lie from the heartless
It doesnít matter
Thereís better waiting in the wings

Yeah Iím going to be spiteful
Spiting out these little girl words
Just wait
It gets easier in the end





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*the present is just a pleasant interruption of this past...*


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The following comments are for "Spite"
by Angelwithapast

"Spitting" Angel....
In last stanza do you mean "spitting out"? I know you are being "spiteful", but you are not "spiting" in next line.?.I do like this piece. A few grammar things, but this line is key, for your piece to work. Keep posting.

B

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: January 28, 2005 )

Hearts
A womens heart that is scorned. you caught it

( Posted by: Anowara [Member] On: November 17, 2005 )





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