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its cold,
too cold to breath,
too cold to touch.

her icy skin,
branded liek metal,
she is owned by her shame.

her thoughts arnt hers,
her body belongs,
belongs to just about anyone.

with riped low rise jeans,
black halter top,
a used smoke crushed at her feet.

she wants to be saved,
but still she waits on the corner,
waits for the vaultures to devour her.

a sinning soul,
once christian chirch girl,
a pretty face yours for a fee.

a one night custumer,
and a dark hotel room,
aquard as usual he pounsed.

At just 16 standing tall,
to be shot down by a killer,
a little man who couldnt pay enough.

its cold,
too cold to breath,
too cold to touch.

her name unknown,
her body cold,
just another slut in there minds.



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*the present is just a pleasant interruption of this past...*


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by Angelwithapast

Krista's "So Cold"...
This is good stuff. I now see your age. I am only tough on grammar, because it will make your work more powerful. Trust me on this. Keep writing and don't fear "editing"...B

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: January 26, 2005 )





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