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This morning I found my world is not so surreal as the dream I had the night before
It's a plain and listless place, men and women live here and I live here
But sometimes I wish I didn't
Cope and strive, cope and stive; we do this and I do this
I open a door and step into a dream and I live there when I do not live here
It is beautiful even though I am alone and I do not care that anyone should see
Someday I will share it with the men and women from the place I live
There are pages written in a book about me here in a language no one can read aloud
I'm an anonymous character with many talents and loves
There is a drama in motion
It is beautiful, it is dark and it is sad and the drama is loved
And I am apart of it
The audience cheers but there is none
The script has no end so they continue to listen even when I close the door on it all and I go back to being real
I've been gone so long and what has changed?
Nothing has changed, it's a plain and listless place


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The following comments are for "Something I dreamnt of"
by Adam Fever

Uh-huh
You packed this bad boy with a lot of moody, dark emotion and I'm so depressed now I'm about to start looking for a stout length of rope. ;(

I'd try to avoid using the same word twice in close proximity. It breaks the spell your casting. But otherwise, it was all good.

Richard

( Posted by: Richard Dani [Member] On: May 30, 2002 )

To True
The message is one that I think everyone has gone through. It is down to earth yet all in the mind, keep it up!
~Chill (0*0)

( Posted by: chill [Member] On: May 30, 2002 )

yeah.
i thought it was quite nice, and i agree that it's something everyone knows. i'm only happy when i'm asleep. that's my alternate world. as always, keep posting.

~v

( Posted by: Veruca Salt [Member] On: May 30, 2002 )

very nice work
i think the repetition helps to show the monotony of waking life. this is a really good piece of poetry. keep it up.

( Posted by: nightshade [Member] On: May 31, 2002 )

Excellent
This poem makes me think of a fantasy I dream about too, being somewhere else besides my own life or living another life. This poem has a lot of detail and makes the reader easily relate to it.

( Posted by: Chanel77 [Member] On: July 15, 2002 )





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