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Beauty
In the early morning
The enchanting flower is coming into blossom
While the glowing of intelligence from the bright dewdrop
disappears quietly!
The flower is sure colorful,
opening out in the sunshine itself immodestly.
Ordinary as the dewdrop is
its lovely brightness keeps for ever in mind!
I love the dewdrop deep
Though it is not the one who can express itself well!
Just many brave ones are everlasting,
so long as you can hold them inside.

In the night
with a smile always on the face of the tender moon
the generous meteor
kindled with excitement and kindness!
the moon itself shines;
But by contributing the brevity of life wholeheartedly
all her time
the meteor shows its generous kindness and magnificent sight!
I prefer Meteor
Though it is not the one who can express herself well
just the yearning for real truth
you can experience a little after suffering much!


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The following comments are for "BEAUTY"
by Clark

Very sweet
I like it a lot, very soothing and wonderful natural imagery. Perhaps there are too many exclamation points, though? You seem to be trying to get through a sort of serenity, and I think it would do much better without the question that an exclamation point puts into readers mind.

Otherwise, absolutely lovely portrayal of beauty.

( Posted by: shefallssoftly [Member] On: February 18, 2005 )

Thanks
Yeah, I am learning to express myself with my limited English, I am not a native English speaker, I think I can learn more from you if you would be kind and patient to me! hehe... I am from China!
Clark

( Posted by: Clark [Member] On: February 20, 2005 )

Beautiful
welcome Clark to lit.org..{I know my welcoming is late}sorry..but I just passed upon your name commenting on other member ..it happens too much when some members lead you to others..
I read your bio and I admire your way of thinking...
I am not a native speaker of English..just like you...but I find myself here as If I really were...there are a lot of nice and friendly members you will meet[including me] lol...Hope to read more of your works...your English is pretty good and I wouldnt notice that it is not your mother tongue...
for your piece here..I find it so lovely for I am so much interested in reading works that contain natural scenes and expressions ..they are romantic and highly elevated


All The Best
Fairgrace

( Posted by: fairgrace [Member] On: February 20, 2005 )





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