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A trickle of water flows steadily
It flows, like so, waiting readily
Until…one day
The dam bursts
And the water gushes away
Suddenly, simple words
Become beautiful poetry
A light kiss
Becomes mindless passion
A slow dance
Becomes an erotic motion
And a meaningless touch
Becomes…everything

And long after the water has gone
It leaves the imprint of where it has been
The mark of first escape
A road for other waters
To come and take


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Though nothing can bring back the hour
Of splendour in the grass,
of glory in the flower;
We will grieve not, rather find
Strength in what remains behind

(William Wordsworth)




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The following comments are for "Water Flow / First Love"
by seriousinsanity

erious "Love Flow"
I really liked this combination. Good read.


B

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: January 28, 2005 )

Seriuosinsanity...
Don't know what happened ..the "S" got away..Look forward to more of your work..

B

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: January 28, 2005 )

Your Poem
Wow, I really like this poem, the ideas and relationships are so true.

( Posted by: Hokmah [Member] On: January 28, 2005 )





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