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The curtain rises
Revealing the magical world behind
A world where both fact and myth combine
Where the difference is impossible to decipher
A world…where all things become possible

The players
They show all emotion…they emphasize every word
The game is well known, well rehearsed
But, above all else, they know one game
They know love

Love becomes life
When they meet, every heart beats
When they love…a sigh escapes from the rafters above
When they sacrifice…there is not a dry eye
How can they live without each other?
And how can the audience live without them?

The love of those two players becomes vital
And, at once, damned
Every soul cries out to them
Every heart rejoices
And at that moment…their fate is decided

They will die
They will die for honor
They will die for sacrifice
They will die for love
They will die
They will die for Each Other

The curtain closes
The Audience holds its breath
Waiting—as the seconds tick by
Waiting for a scene
A scene…that will never come


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Though nothing can bring back the hour
Of splendour in the grass,
of glory in the flower;
We will grieve not, rather find
Strength in what remains behind

(William Wordsworth)




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The following comments are for "The Play"
by seriousinsanity

Much...
...better than the last poem of yours that I read. Interesting comparison, you make, between love and theatre.

Fave part:

They will die
They will die for honor
They will die for sacrifice
They will die for love
They will die
They will die for Each Other

The curtain closes
The Audience holds its breath
Waiting—as the seconds tick by
Waiting for a scene
A scene…that will never come
...

I don't know if it was intentional, but capitalizing Audience gives that line a whole deeper meaning. Loved the rhythmic repetition of 'They will die'... Your best lines, I think, are:

'How can they live without each other?
And how can the audience live without them?'

Nice statement.


There is a lot to like about this, thematically, and it's lightyears ahead of the last poem of yours I read. Still, there are a few things I'd touch up, but it's all personal opinion.

Well done.

-SD

( Posted by: strangedaze [Member] On: January 27, 2005 )





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