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Under my brain,
there's something breaking me down;
below my name,
a place carrying me around.

Lying here is easy,
every day, every night.

When it's cold,
worms sleep next to me.
I don't mind them like this darkness,
or all that marching.

Sometimes I wish I could stand, just to stand.

But lying here is easy,
every day, every night.

Neighbors, neighbors, neighbors,
wish they would go away.
If only this hilltop
could be mine to stay.

Can't read, can't eat,
getting bloody tired of sleep.

But lying here is easy,
every day, every night.

Yes, lying here is easy,
every day, every night.




*penned Fall of 1974.
Edited to form:
10.27.08


------
below the subliminal
deep within manipulation
that's where tr^th resides

2 Dec 2011






























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The following comments are for "Even's Holiday"
by Bobby7L

i hope you dont mind...
I hope you don't mind if I say this, but I can imagine this being a song, your poem is quite catchy and nicely made.
Thanks for the fun read!
-Alex

( Posted by: amusedlilboy [Member] On: January 25, 2005 )

Penelope's perspective
Considering he is decaying in a casket, I suppose he could be "bored" out of his skull...While the Earth "below" him keeps "carrying " him around...Thanks for reading and commenting..B

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: January 25, 2005 )

Alex's "HH"..Lyric?
Funny you should say that Alex..Almost posted as a lyric, because of way it looked..Penned when I was 21 and in a "Booo"-rish "Holiday" mood..Thanks for commenting...B

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: January 25, 2005 )

Lucie's Spooky "hilltop" visit..
Something went sideways..I'll try this again..Lucie, I penned as a "Halloween" hoot..Just good clean theatre of the absurd fun..Thanks for visiting and commenting.


B

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: January 25, 2005 )

Demeter Visists Dead...
Thanks for extravagant rating..A "novelty song" perhaps?....

B

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: January 26, 2005 )

"Visits" them too....
Don't know how that happened..Miss all you guys.

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: January 26, 2005 )

worms turn
What's eating this guy? I hope he doesn't get restless.

( Posted by: drsoos [Member] On: January 26, 2005 )

Soos Sees Walking Dead
Worms. Out of season, I know, but a little "grave"-ity seemed in order...If they'd just stop marching around up there! I could get some rest.


Booo!-by

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: January 26, 2005 )

Halloween in Bobby's head
Bobby, This definately reads as a song, reminded me of a song I sang back in elementary, incredible I can remember that far back, geesh! Loved this creepy poem. Your way with words makes reading you fun!

Nae

( Posted by: nae411 [Member] On: February 16, 2005 )

Nae: October Child....
Nae: Libra, that's me..October is my favorite month, especially in Northeast, U. S...Burning leaves, pumpkins, cider...and Allhallows.

Thank you for trick-or-treating by,
Boooo-by

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: February 16, 2005 )

All Hallow Even Everyone!
Posted this piece shortly after arriving here at Lit. Was not timely at time, so at least in spirit, it's back...

Undisguised,
Boo B.

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: October 31, 2005 )

B7L...
Ghoul Cool, I like...I like...
nicely digested...write more creepy stuff!

Robin

( Posted by: Robinbird [Member] On: October 31, 2005 )

Robin takes Halloween Holiday
Robin- Thanks...Penned 3 decades ago...


"Ghoul Cool"...I like that!



Boo!
B

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: October 31, 2005 )

Happy All Hallow Even Everyone!
Another year...A tradition, of sorts..

Penned 3 decades before: "Hungry Ghost"

Happy Halloween!

Bobby7L


( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: October 31, 2006 )

Happy Halloween Bob!
Wow! Good idea Bob, think I'm gonna immitate this, I mean bringing back an old halloween post by writing a comment on it. I enjoyed reading this, truly creepy that the newbies here will enjoy reading because just like me they missed this one last year!

( Posted by: peterpaulino [Member] On: October 31, 2006 )

Who got worms?
I got my NERD (WERD) costume on and I got me club...Now give me the chocolate...and none of them little bars... I want me a huge bar of DARK chocolate...need a fix...Happy treats with no tricks to ya...Kacee

( Posted by: nitz kitty [Member] On: October 31, 2006 )

Happy Halloween Again
Stopped by to repeat the treat. Enjoyed reading it again. Enjoy the spooky day...

Nae

( Posted by: nae411 [Member] On: October 31, 2006 )

Peter/Kacee/Renae
Peter- Thanks. Penned back in college days...Predates "Hungry Ghost", by 32 years.

Kacee- Hope you get treat desired...Thanks

Renae- Brought out of vault for early on Lit-post, then reintroduced at holiday last year..Now it's a tradition, of sorts...

Much thanks..

To ghosts and goblins!


( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: October 31, 2006 )

All Hallow Even Greetings!
Lit family,
Hope everyone has a ghoulishly delightful time tricking and treating...

Ghost of own making..

October child,
Robert William

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: October 28, 2008 )

All-Hallows-Even
still looking up, around and within..

reporting from field

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: October 31, 2011 )





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