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Nobody likes a kidder

they talk behind your back

They pass off trash like its art

They'll wear your best dress

and snag it on a nail

it looks all wrong

with her hair color

and that boyfriend she keeps around

Just to find herself

Slightly lighter

Slightly higher

Than the rest,

her words can't keep up

but the people suck 'em down

they're simple, they don't fuck

around with anybody's

sense of controversy.

I'm not particularly Au Fait

she says and her face

over the years, turning to

prescription painkillers

and nembies on the cab ride to

Central is slowly twisting,

while you mainline smack

and have kept a heart attack in check

for 7 years

5 days

and 73 hours.


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The following comments are for "Nobody likes a kidder"
by MsZ

Everybody read this poem
Hey, I know these people. They're friends and enemies and I can't fucking stand them, but I keep 'em around to ward off that devastating broedom and lonliness that grows as I age.

And you know them too.

If you put together a book, I'd buy it in an instant.

( Posted by: Viper9 [Member] On: January 24, 2005 )

MsZ's not kidding....
I like the piece, but question formula regarding when to capitalize and when not, at start of lines. It's haphazard. Other than that, good writing.

BobbyG

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: January 24, 2005 )

Merci beaucoup
Thanks Viper.

Thanks bobby. The poem was typed very quickly. "haphazard" grammer is inevitable for me, since I'm too damn lazy to proof read. I do admire e.e.cummings ability to dismiss remedial grammer and allow expression outwidth the confines of grammatical "error". If only I had his talent. I might've gotten away with it.

Dang. ;-)

( Posted by: MsZ [Member] On: January 24, 2005 )





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