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You always want what you can’t have:
The moon the stars, happiness.
It's always a step - a step to far;
One that you can’t reach, no matter how far.
You can only have a brief taste before you fall.


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The following comments are for "Can't Reach"
by poetfreak

True
Poet Freak,

I like the content of your poem. It is so true for so many people...

I also liked: "A brief taste before you fall."

The feedback in this room is very helpful. I'm currently re-working some pieces, myself.

So, how would you punctuate this poem? Anything like this? I have trouble with this too - obviously.

You always want what you can’t have:
The moon the stars, happiness.
It's always a step - a step to far;
One that you can’t reach, no matter how far.
You can only have a brief taste before you fall.

( Posted by: feliciastone [Member] On: January 22, 2005 )

Can't Reach
Thank you for the input I have been working on my grammar and punctuation in my writing if I missed any thing let me know.

PoetFreak

( Posted by: poetfreak [Member] On: April 1, 2005 )





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