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It's no cosmic trajectory.
Just the Winthrop-sea road
and the shooshing sounds of cars
as they suck the wet road. This
and the sight of starfish, flung
and dead as they litter up the bushes.
This is what the storm leaves us.
Together we walk, yet we are apart.
I hear nothing but the hollow sound
of insomnia and grief, for which no pill
promises relief. See m fingers fly:
think white across the page, snow capped
and tipped. Words form, their curls an
open-mouthed infant, newly weaned
and wailing.

Even now, I could pick you from a crowd
of thousands. You coat that splits
like a dove tail, your face purposeful,
determined. Your dance-like walk -
uniquely yours, some Scicilian half-
tango, it still lives in your blood,
It is there when we part.
It is there when you move.
It is there when you walk away.



------
Sadi Ranson-Polizzotti

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http://www.sottovocce.blogspot.com/
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The following comments are for "walk by the sea after the storm"
by sadijane

parts I like
Sadi,

I liked [starfish, flung
and dead as they litter up the bushes.]

and

[Words form, their curls an
open-mouthed infant, newly weaned
and wailing.]

I might change the second [road] in the first stanza to tar or something as not to be redundant.

Felicia


( Posted by: feliciastone [Member] On: January 20, 2005 )

felicia
good catch , felicia;

i hate repeating words, so this is very useful to me. glad you liked other parts of it though but i'll fix up the word repetition before i submit it anywher else.

thanks for your help and for catching this. again, good call.

Be well, and thanks for caring enough to read and to comment!

Cheers and be well,

Sadi

( Posted by: sadijane [Member] On: January 20, 2005 )





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