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[Posted in Poetry to appease purists.]

Told what I "must" do,
Iím just perverse enough to
Break haiku taboo.

Not "precise" enough?
Scorpios love mystery.
Iíll let you wonder.

Genre gate-crasher!
Spoiling the ceremony!
Who let her in here??

Donít pay me no mind.
Iím just here for discipline Ė
To learn brevity.


------
Time flies like an arrow. Fruit flies like a banana. - Groucho Marx



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The following comments are for "Per Verse Haiku Trilogy"
by LinnieRed

Well, yes but...
This subject is near and dear to my heart. I initially scoffed at the "purists" but then I considered my own rage and indignation regarding inaccuracy and my joy that the English language has about a million words to choose from and if you don't like any of those you can make up your own.

I love what you've written here and you may be suprised soon...

...by my perverse mystery. How did you know I'm a Scorpio?


s 1800perversery

( Posted by: drsoos [Member] On: January 21, 2005 )

Tina/Lucie/soosie: Trilogy Genealogy
Thank you Tina, Lucie, and soosie (may I call you soosie?) for your supportive comments, and thanks williamhill/Charlie (which one is it? william or Charlie?? I'm so confused!) for the generous rating! Here's the backstory:

First, props to brad (I'll miss those comments!) for dragging me kicking & screaming into the Land of Succinctity. He deserves credit for bullying me into greater brevity, but no blame for the results.

I posted "Death Notice" in haiku as part experiment in Saying It In Seventeen Syllables, part "venting" over a slightly unpleasant family incident. Teflon graciously pointed out what it needed in order to fit classic haiku form, and I realized that there was more to haiku tradition than 5/7/5 syllabication.

Tef was, as ever, a gentleman about it, but I felt a little foolish in my ignorance of the genre. I felt as if I had - boorish, Midwestern American yahoo that I am - wandered into the middle of a Japanese Tea Ceremony and loudly asked, "Got any decaf?"

So I decided, since I feel a little sheepish, why not use that feeling to spin a yarn? I also noted the "Haiku? Not haiku?" debate following edwinpadillo's "Queer Haiku," and I concluded that the most respectful forum in which to respond to both conversations was the Poetry room. Soosoo, I also like the idea you posted elsewhere, suggesting the category "neo-haiku."

Well, now I've gone & blown the whole brevity shtick. Back to the drawing board.

Oh, and sooScorpio: It takes one to know one. Go ahead - surprise me! I won't be surprised that you can! How about this: write the next installment of "Doggerel Show" in haiku form!

( Posted by: LinnieRed [Member] On: January 22, 2005 )

Linnie of Length, I Laughed
A very funny, wry tongue in cheek take on an endless debate.

Per your Haiku Verse Trilogy -- is that fourth haiku stanza a bonus pun, then? Or am I just reading too much in between the lines, again?

( Posted by: hazelfaern [Member] On: January 23, 2005 )

hazelfaern/Trilogy take
Thanks for laughing - and for noticing the "bonus pun"! I was wondering if anyone would. ; )

( Posted by: LinnieRed [Member] On: January 23, 2005 )





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