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We Are The Loneliest Souls
(an Ode)

I.
We are the loneliest souls
When we choose to walk
This Valley of Poets
We leave the planet
We pack our things
We carry our quills
And writing tablets
We know we are
The loneliest of souls—
We look back on our lives
At our dreams
At our illusions
And pull a portion
To share to every gathering’s
Dinner buffet—
So we all sup
On each other’s tears
Or laughter
Or adventures
Or misfortunes
We are the loneliest of souls

II.
We are the loneliest souls
When we peek in through
Teary-eyed
Because a husband cheated
Or a daughter sick
Or a parent died
Or a brother unkind
Or a friend
Simply walked away—
Teary-eyed because
We are happy
That love found us finally
When we are about
To stop searching
Happy enough
We could write a sonnet or two
And yet no one would read—
We peek in through
This Valley of Poets
Teary-eyed
(We know we are
The loneliest of souls)

III.
We are the loneliest souls
But not so much
When we flock
When we build
When we discuss
When we prove
When we tend someone’s garden
Before bedtime
When we wake up unmindful
Of our morning coffee
Because someone’s words
Are waiting to be gathered
We know we are
The loneliest of souls
But not so anymore
As we think of each moment
Of our lives
Which we wink into permanence
Portraits taken
For everyone’s viewing pleasure

IV.
We are the loneliest souls
No more
Nevermore—
Until some hints of reality
Reminders of the cruel world
Appear before us—
We return as fast
To our earth
Where we gladly
Bitterly accept
We are the loneliest
The loneliest of souls
(We leave the Valley
We snuff out
The little flame
Of our tiny candle
The small light
Of our microcosm)


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*************************************
crystal face I kiss
tongue tastes like sweet cold rain
I fall into pond




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The following comments are for "We Are The Loneliest Souls"
by peterpaulino

Peter's Ode
Excellent ode, Peter. It is as true as can be and very well written. Anyone can see the passion of this writing.

charlie

( Posted by: williamhill [Member] On: January 17, 2005 )

Peter's "Ode"....
You once again pen the perfect piece for the moment(At this time, at this place)..Excellent writing.

BobbyG

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: January 17, 2005 )

Absolutely
Well, didn't this strike a chord. I don't get moved by much, but this piece blew me right out of the stratosphere. Absolutely beautiful. This is the first work of yours that I've read, but be sure that I'll be digging around through the rest.

( Posted by: Jei [Member] On: January 17, 2005 )

No so Peter!
As long as we have Lit.org to tell our troubles and share our dreams with! How can we be lonely with so many friends cheering us on...feeling our pain, knowing they have been there before us!

This was brilliant Peter...I'm so proud of you!

Ma

( Posted by: Beatrice Boyle [Member] On: January 17, 2005 )

freakin A!
A quick visit with a friend, a chance meeting of a heretofore stranger, a few tenuous steps onto terra infirma- I've not even begun to explore this valley.
What a lovely lonely view from here.

( Posted by: drsoos [Member] On: January 17, 2005 )

a different reading
Peter I'm adding this to one of my favorites :-) I wouldn't like any revisions I like it as is. A Goya or Pollock needs to be frozen in time and the emotions captured here should be kept as a testament to any poets struggle.

I feel you, chief.

( Posted by: webguy [Member] On: January 17, 2005 )

lonely souls
This is good. What a sumation of what it's like to write! Anyone who's experienced the birth pains of composition will relate. I'd advise sending this to writing mags or e-zines for publication. It's almost haunting, this piece.

( Posted by: malthis [Member] On: January 17, 2005 )

Loniliest Soul
Peter, I read this at WF, wanted to comment but was left kind of speechless. So I have come by and read this another 20 times, and finally found my words. How Peter, tell me how do you come up with these words? They are deep and penetrate the poet's heart. I love it, I call myself lucky to be your friend. Thank you so much for sharing your talent with us.

Nae

( Posted by: nae411 [Member] On: January 17, 2005 )

Peter's ode
Peter ..your ode is a very incredible and amazing work
I like the second part most
I consider it as a magnum opus:)
regards
Fairgrace

( Posted by: fairgrace [Member] On: January 17, 2005 )

Thank You Peter
I don't get to come here as often as I would like and I therefor rely on the attention of others to maintain this wonderful community in my absence. You are one of those people Peter and the sentiments expressed in this lovely poem are what makes our community so special. -Philo

( Posted by: philo [Member] On: January 17, 2005 )

A Masterpiece
This, my friend, is a masterpiece. It ought to be published.

You have tremendous skill. Somehow you manage to evoke a contradictory mess of emotions in me, all competing for attention, within one poem. Your way with words, your peaceful and reflective nature, your natural rhythm -- everything I love about your work is on display here.

Truly terrific.

( Posted by: Viper9 [Member] On: January 19, 2005 )

compliment!
How much more can I say. All these great comments...and this poetry is just beautiful.
Keep 'em coming.

( Posted by: Serendipity [Member] On: April 18, 2005 )





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