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Pray the day is thick

with old ghosts. They

cluck their heavy tongues

disapprovingly, chill

the air where I walk.

They mean to give

some sign. They mean

to take and squander

what is mine.

Line between them and me,

what is meant to be, and so on.

I do not believe. I do not believe!

Our fates are not proscribed.

No Calivinist I.

I walk through the sheeted rain

My beach, raw and grew

the ocean tossing and rolling.

It meets my hand like a cat

butts its head against my palm.

No goddess I. Why then so

chosen? Why the electric-

epileptic, the conduit

and shaman. The witness

of it all?

I sit on the seawall,

rain soaked, uncertain.

No light nor luminosity.

I am poured to the greys.

To the silver-white rolls.

I think about intent.

Wonder if the oceanís

grey eye means to take

those it does, to draw us

deep to its gaze before

the lids slide closed

never again to open.

Sadi Ranson-Polizzotti

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The following comments are for "sitting on the seawall"
by sadijane

Loved the imagery. Something about this that I really like, but can't put my finger on. Particularly liked the last stanza, that sense that the sea possesses a sort of sentience beyond our comprehension. Capital.

( Posted by: Jei [Member] On: January 17, 2005 )

hey and thanks to both for comments. About the lines, that was an accident. there should have been no spaces between the lines, so that answers that. it was not a literary device - merely a computer glitch and when i pasted, oops, there it was.

as for the sea, yes, it was intended to have a sentience, that's exactly what i wanted or want to impart and i'm really glad that came across. having lived near the sea for most of my life, i have a strong connection with it and see it most every day, so i perhaps see it as somewhat anthropamorphized (sp?) and human in quality.

thanks for reading, as ever and always for commenting...

be well to you both, and all good things,


( Posted by: sadijane [Member] On: January 17, 2005 )

thanks jess:

i'll fix the hard returns in future pieces. sorry about that. it just came out that way. is there a way for me to edit this or can you easily go in? if not, just let me know how and i'll do it or maybe i'll just do for future pieces....

thanks for the tip. I posted from Word and the returns just went in as breaks, i guess, even though it is single spaced in the original. Weird.

will try another...

cheers, and thanks again,


( Posted by: sadijane [Member] On: January 17, 2005 )

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