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from a fitful sleep at two pm, i stumble through the door, my head awhirl and styrofoam hand; orange juice runs deliberately down my chin, quite fascinated by the curves and the bumps on my skin: mixed up, fumble for a cigarette in filthy clothes, watching the flame dance about like a nijinsky styled overture.

the thin breeze threatened to freeze, i scanning the nearby forest for a sign of unease; a bird unknown to even my own trained eye ghosts on silent wings to the furthest reaches, a place i'll never venture, so i dream of quiet beaches, the waves lapping contentedly at rocks unconcerned, a fragrance of brine and vapor, rising new.

unheard, he creeps, a hunter in the afternoon pierced through with trails of light; a muted whisper then my cigarette falls unfinished: i live in the ocean, bleeding cobalt blue, dreaming.



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The following comments are for "sniper"
by verve

Excellent
Powerful word use! I love stories about snipers to begin with, but using the targets veiwpoint was an excellent Idea:)

~Chill (0*0)

( Posted by: chill [Member] On: May 28, 2002 )

ooo
i'm giving you a 9 for this one, because of the idea of the poem in itself. i liked this one alot :oP so far, it's prolly my favourite of yours. as always, keep posting.

~v

( Posted by: Veruca Salt [Member] On: May 28, 2002 )





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