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toothless revolutionary
By Sean Nelson

On the fourth of September, a number was born.
A healthy statistic, it weighed ten pounds and one ounce.
It was a file in a doctor's office,
a case for the number abuse prosecutor,
an excellent elementary school report card, an educational expense of the state, a diploma, a college transcript which produced another diploma.
It was an employee, an economic contributor, a yearly tax filing in number two pencil.
It was a receipt at an arts supply store, a note-scribbled file in a psychologist's office, a pink slip, a missing number report, a felony robbery charge not filed for lack of an imprisoned number, a fingerprint recovered from a murder scene.
It was a hostage situation, a threatened subtraction of population numbers, a political manifesto printed at the point of a gun.
It was a headline about a daring escape, an article about a murdered policeman.
It was a number-hunt, ending in a self subtraction determined by dental records.
It was a suicide note, brave if optimistic. It said, "I am a man."
And it was, away in the forest, a toothless, bleeding gum Wagnerian revolutionary, recently escaped from the matrix, hoping to crash the computer and free his brothers.



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The following comments are for "toothless revolutionary"
by Seanspacey

hell yes.
i really liked the idea of that. it's in a more rant-type form, but i love it anyhow. can't say much...it's fucking awesome. as always, keep posting.

~v

( Posted by: Veruca Salt [Member] On: May 23, 2002 )

awesome
i loved the use of the number motif, and the simple declaration, "i am a man." the motif flowed without any feeling of absurdity or falseness. this is really good work.

( Posted by: nightshade [Member] On: May 31, 2002 )

Powerful writing
I like the way you beat the drum by repeat the phrase "It was.." and by the repetition of the number theme. These methods drive your points home. Great writing here. I have to look up more of your work.

Richard

( Posted by: Richard Dani [Member] On: June 14, 2002 )





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